The sea of humans around
Strange faces
Confused feelings
Varied expressions
All seems lost and puzzled
Buried in their own thoughts
Carrying the baggage on shoulders
Each one pacing towards an unknown world
In the jiggling of neon lights
In screeching of loud music
We can’t hear and see what stories they carry
Just passive souls passing by
An ocean of deep souls
Bewildered and android!
The way you captured an entire universe of untold stories in a crowd is just so beautiful!
This ocean of humans is not empty — it is overflowing with hidden battles, loneliness wrapped in routine, and hearts quietly drowning in silence.
Perhaps the greatest tragedy is not that people are lost, but that no one notices they are.
Yes, each one carries a story and a baggage on their shoulders..
The way you captured an entire universe of untold stories in a crowd is so beautuful!
This piece beautifully captures the hustle and chaos of today’s world, where people are surrounded by crowds yet feel deeply alone. In the race of modern life, the barakah in time, purity in relationships, and true understanding between people all seem to be fading away.
Undoubtedly it depicts the current situation.
It’s sad to read and realise we’re living through it!
True!
Your piece feels like a quiet observation of modern life —
crowded yet lonely, loud yet emotionally silent. I really loved how you described people as “an ocean of deep souls… it gives the poem both sadness and humanity at the same time. The contrast between neon lights, loud music, and the hidden inner stories of people is very powerful and relatable.
You have a beautiful way of turning ordinary scenes into meaningful emotions. Keep writing like this — your words make readers pause and think beyond what they normally see. With every word, your voice is becoming more mature, expressive, and impactful. Proud of you for writing from such a deep place. 🌸💖🦋
Thank you for your meaningful & kind input.
What a beautiful expression RJ!
Bewildered is the word that stood out for me. Indeed, it’s bewildering to be living in a world so confusing, intriguing and deceiving all at the same time.
And illusive too!
We need more of this 😍
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“Each one pacing towards an unknown world” how poignant and ironical is our existence in this fake world! Love your poetry, Rahila!
Unknown souls we have become and racing after unknown desires..
Profound!